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Please bring a hard copy of the Works Cited page- Tues.- Ms. M :)

The description of setting in the opening paragraph is absolutely beautiful. I did feel, however, that your thesis could have been clarified if you specifically cited Tess of the d’Urbervilles. Nevertheless, I enjoyed how you juxtaposed popular conceptions of setting with Hardy’s personal utilization of setting. I wish you had gone into more depth about industrialization and the symbolism of the reaping machine because it would have made your argument even more effective. My only concern is how others will be able to offer a rebuttal to your points.
~Chris Horton Period 1

Nancy,
I love your writing style; it is sophisticated, elegant, and beautiful. I agree with your thesis, though I think it could have been better supported with broader examples that show how the setting affects the book as a whole rather than only in specific instances. You gave good examples of the specific instances but not enough to really support your point strongly. I also felt that the paper was rather brief and the topic could be explored a little more in-depth. Overall though, your writing style was amazing and you did support your point in the end, though I would have liked it to be a little better supported.
- Eleni Christou

Hey Nancy,
It's so evident how much time and effort you put into your paper, and the fluidity of the paper and confidence in your thesis proves that. I hope when it comes to AP Seminar day you are prepared enough to be able to prove your points to the class and they are arguable, so I would do some extra research to prepare yourself. Although the writing was beautiful, I do feel you could have made it more thorough, with more research being done to promote your thesis a little better. Overall though, wonderful job, it was a captivating and interesting subject you picked, and good luck on AP Seminar day!
-Chelsea Starr